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task 1 : The diagram details the process of producing olive oil.

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The given illustration depicts the olive oil production process. In general, it is noticeable that there are a total of seven steps involved, beginning with picking ripe
olives
 from the trees and ending with the product being packaged and sold. In the first
step
, farmers gather mature
olives
 from trees and transport them to a rinsing machine, where they are cleaned with cold water. When the
olives
 have been cleaned, they are sent on a conveyor belt to a machine that grinds them to remove the pits. At
this
 point, the
olives
 are processed into a paste by being crushed up and the olive seeds removed. In the following
step
, after being placed in a bag with holes, the olive paste is compressed in a machine, and the remaining water is extracted from the oil in a subsequent
step
. The
last
step
 is for the olive oil to be packaged and distributed to stores for sale.
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