Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
contemporary era
there is Add a comma
,era
heated
argument over the issue that nowadays Add an article
a heated
the heated
number
of nations suffering an economic downturn.A majority of society is Change the article
a number
the number
favour
that it is better for each Add an article
a favour
the favour
country
to focus on its own difficulties rather than giving hand each
other.I disaccord Change preposition
to each
this
mentioned phenomenon.However
,I will discuss with logical
conclusion in Add an article
the logical
a logical
upcoming
paragraph.
There Correct article usage
the upcoming
are
Change the verb form
is
adiquate
evidence of Correct your spelling
adequate
this
view which are substantial.The first and foremost one is during the pandemic of covid-19 every country
had
faced a huge loss of economic shrinkage.Adding more to it If that time Unnecessary verb
apply
the
all community think that we are not going to help Remove the article
apply
other
Change the wording
another country
other countries
country
we only helped themselves
Correct pronoun usage
ourselves
then
in this
epoch i
think most of the Change the capitalization
I
countries
will die.Additionally
for example
like in some report
Fix the agreement mistake
reports
in
the pandemic Change preposition
during
of
covid-19 Change preposition
apply
india
had no more oxygen gas but Change the capitalization
India
at
the Change preposition
in
end
Add a comma
,end
singapore
helped to send oxygen via air.Change the capitalization
Singapore
Consequently
one helped Add a comma
,Consequently
saved
Wrong verb form
save
someone
life.
Probing ahead some undeveloped Change noun form
someone's
countries
faced so many difficulties such
as medicine,food,land etc.when some countries
suffer
Wrong verb form
suffered
with
Change preposition
from
unknow
situations Correct your spelling
unknown
then
the developed countries
helped them to supply food,clothes,medicines and other additional facilities.Moreover
,During the time of pandemic
there are no Add a comma
,pandemic
such
jobs for any individual in some countries
.Although
other developed countries
open so many vaccancy
during covid-19 for hiring Correct your spelling
vacancy
foreigners
Replace the word
foreign
worker
they give them shelter,food Fix the agreement mistake
workers
as well as
medical facilities. While
there are huge contributions for one country
to another country
when they suffering
with Wrong verb form
suffer
such
kind of problems.
To conclude
,countries
have share
their own facilities.Change the verb form
shared
While
others nation
Fix the agreement mistake
other nations
face
some Change the verb form
faces
problem
.Fix the agreement mistake
problems
However
,according to
me
Add a comma
,me
countries
have to always take stand
to help another community.Add an article
a stand
the stand
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