Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently the issue has been brought into focus is young people should be treated the same punishments as
adults
by the government
. Personally, I would argue that the authorities do not have to treat teenagers like adults
. In this
essay
I will discuss Add a comma
,essay
about
why the Remove the preposition
apply
government
should not do that.
One thing is
of great significance is that Unnecessary verb
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children
are immature and they just mimic what people do. Because they may not have good
education from their parents and others. Add an article
a good
As a result
, they can not control their behaviour and misuse of drugs and alcohol. The most familiar example of this
is in the US, teenagers who are in
the age of 18, Change preposition
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they
will have an inclination to live alone, so they could learn bad habits from their friends Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as pulling an all nighter
to play games and they Add a hyphen
all-nighter
also
could face some financial challenges. Probably, there is some truth in the idea that children
could be suffered from some mistakes because of the lack of education.
Another special consideration in this
case is that
negative influence of Correct determiner usage
the
adults
. In fact, children
develop their soft skills and social skills by observing old generation
actions. Add a hyphen
old-generation
Therefore
, the states should not treat them by the same legislations
as Fix the agreement mistake
legislation
adults
. They could tackle this
matter by setting a good example, encouraging responsible behaviour and reinstating firm discipline. It seems quite clear that it is necessary for the government
cooperate
with Add the particle
to cooperate
adults
to give them good example
of behaviour Fix the agreement mistake
examples
instead
of imposing strict laws.
From what we have discussed above, we may draw to
the conclusion that Change preposition
apply
children
should not be treated like adults
. I strongly believe that the government
may solve this
problem by using suggested
measures above.Correct article usage
the suggested
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite