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It is argued that mobile phones and other electronic devices have no place in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

#phones #devices #place #classroom
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It is approved that mobile
phones
 and other
devices
 have no place in the school. I agree with
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 since children must study in the classroom and not be distracted. In
this
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 I will discuss
phones
 in the classrooms. First of all, students must not
use
 any
devices
 in educational institutions to focus on the task
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they were given and they can become addicted to gadgets. Chiefly when pupils
use
phones
 they do not do tasks and do not listen to the teacher. Statistically, students who are focused on the exercises make more progress in study.
For instance
, in
Korea
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the
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school
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 pupils do not
use
 electronics like
phones
 because of that in Korea a list of successful people. That's why it is more important not to
use
devices
 in those places.
Secondly
, Every school needs to put a limit on the
use
 of gadgets. Namely limited at
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8:00PM-9:00PM learners can
use
phones
 and at other times they can not
use
. When people, especially children,
use
 a lot, they come across unusual apps which are dangerous .
Thus
 we can understand that in the classroom no
devices
 are necessary.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that in the future
this
 problem finds a solution. If all schools included interesting programs, children would stop using their phone and waste their time for free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Integration
  • Educational settings
  • Learning tools
  • Educational apps
  • Modern teaching methods
  • Unrestricted access
  • Distractions
  • Learning focus
  • Balanced approach
  • Usage policies
  • Pedagogical benefits
  • Classroom dynamics
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