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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The
administration
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 focus is purely on attaining the growth in
economy
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the economy
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. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 public authorities need to change their attention towards improvement in quality of life and
education
 for everyone hereby,
this
 essay describes
about
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the pros and cons of
importance
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the importance
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 of the duties taken by the government.
Firstly
,
through
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the process of improving the quality of life and
education
 establishes a plethora of opportunities for the
people
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therefore
 the lifestyle of the
people
 gradually
grow
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moreover
 developing the infrastructure facilities of hospitals and other institutions is necessary
furthermore
 providing
scholorships
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scholarships
 to help students in backward classes and subsidies in various forms and improving the research and development .
For instance
, when there was a covid outbreak around 90% of
countires
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countries
counties
 faced
lack
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 of health infrastructure and
this
have
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caused
loss
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the loss
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 of thousands of life
such
 causalities can be solved only with the help of
aloting
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allotting
 more funds.
On the other hand
, finance
minister
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ministers
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 are required to consult
day to day
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 meetings with the concerned departments in
education
, tourism and sports
thus
 knowing the
probems
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problems
 faced by the public
in addition
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launching different schemes and implementing those schemes for the betterment of the
people
.
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, Swatch
bharat
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Bharat
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 mission and
Education
 for all was started by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 in India
intial
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initial
 period
partcipation
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participation
to
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 the program was lower but
later
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the later
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 program got a wide audience and resulted in
a
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great success. even though economic progress is important showing
surge
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a surge
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 in the GDP of the country by increasing the import and exports
however
 other factors concerning the
people
 should be taken as the primary
prefernace
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preference
reference
.
To sum up
,
i
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 agree that
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the preferance
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preferance
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preference
to
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for
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 public health and
education
 should be given by authorities than considering economic progress and
also
 with the help of thorough research and analysis government can solve
one third
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one-third
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 of
problems
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the problems
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 faced by the citizens of the country.
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