As major cities around the world are growing, so are their problems. What are these problems for young people living in cities? What are possible solutions for these problems?

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As major cities around the world are growing, so are their problems. What are these problems for young people living in cities? What are possible solutions for these problems?

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These days people spend more than more time at work and less time at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others sy it is government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give yto our opinion.

‘’Prevention is better than cure.’’ Researching and treating diseases is too costly , so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. Do you agree or disagree with the given statement ?