Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at presuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Advertisement
, which is known as the heart of any market, is playing a controversial role nowadays.
While
many believe that it has had remarkable success to attract customers, some people come to
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effect of it, as
customer
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see it
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tedious. I personally share the opinion of those who still say advertising is going well even if we can recognize some
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in it. To introduce a product's functions and applications we are seeking to get, and,
furthermore
, to say how we apply a device efficiently more,
advertisement
, I suppose, has been presenting shiny performance since a few decades ago. Generally speaking, two items, which can be seen clearly behind
this
kind of programme,
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creativity and innovation opening
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path
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toward
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cognition awareness in
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society. In general, apart from the funny
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they normally consist of, adverts, for me, are seeming to be instructive in case I have not yet observed the item before.
Thus
, neither will any item be recognized as useful nor the comparison is impossible in order to end up making
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choice
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.
On the other hand
, as long as a programme tend to just
presuade
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persuade
people to feel like they have new needs to meet, and they should allocate some budget, it may only hunt fashion slaves, as others consider
such
information far-fetch.
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of
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believe
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that as far as essential needs are concerned, the main implication of
advertisement
seems to produce extra
unneccessary
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unnecessary
needs.
Besides
, a huge proportion of money
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being paid to prepare these kinds of programmes;
however
, my society,
for instance
, has
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money to tackle some other essential matters like improving
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goods
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reasonable price. In conclusion, even though the main mission of
adveritising
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advertising
a product is selling before addressing any other values a product can possess,
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it would be difficult to get insights about what we should buy whether
advertisement
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advertisements
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are reliable or
we
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whether we
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should evaluate them before making any decision to buy an object.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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