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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Some people agree that
home
school
 is the best solution for their
children
 in many aspects.
However
,
the
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others disagree because they believe that the real
school
 will serve many advantages that
does
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 not exist in
home
school
. In my point of view, these two directions have their own benefits and will be
dicussed
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discussed
 in the following paragraphs before a conclusion is reached.
Home
 teaching is the new and popular way to raise pupils
in
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these days. Parents can fully focus on their own
children
 and guide them
which
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 direction they will pursue
according to
 their field of
interests
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.
Therefore
, parents can significantly control the quality of their
kids
, especially in nutrition, and education which are two essential factors for pupils in order to become
well prepared
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 men.
On the contrary
, typical
school raising
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kids
 will be prepared
others
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 skills apart from
home
school
.
For instance
, Working as a team,
real life
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 experiences, good communication and social gathering are some of
fundamental
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 life skills that everyone should learn in order to live and confront the
real life
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 situation.
In addition
, there are various
kind
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 of activities
can
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that can
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 be attended to inspire
kids
pursuing
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to pursue
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 their career
path
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paths
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 in the future. These are some of
major
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 factors,
children
 will be led into a successful path
according to
 their interest area.
From
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 my opinion, both
way
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 of raising
children
 have their own advantages and drawbacks, Parents should adjust the education path for their own
kids
due to
 talents and situations. Everyone is unique.
As a result
, education choices will serve them differently.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeschooling
  • traditional schooling
  • development
  • individualized education
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • one-on-one attention
  • learning style
  • pace
  • safe and controlled learning environment
  • practical learning
  • negative influences
  • socialization
  • teamwork skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • independence
  • time management
  • qualified teachers
  • specialized resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • sense of community
  • hybrid approach
  • personality
  • striking a balance
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