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Some believe technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#believe #technology #lives #life
Nowadays,
people
has
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became
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 too much dependent on smart technological
gadgets
.A fraction of individuals
opine
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 that
,
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 technological evolution has made humans too difficult, and to avoid
this
 issue individuals should not
use
 any kind of technical
gadgets
.I completely disagree with
above
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 notion.In the forthcoming
paragraphs
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i
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 have
elobareted
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elaborated
such
 reasons regarding it.
The first
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 and foremost technological advancements are very beneficial for
human
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humans
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 in their work-life.To
elobaret
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cabaret
this
,
multi national
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multinational
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 corporations
uses
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 electronic
gadgets
 like
,
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 computers,printers,xerox
machine
 and so on.which make a
buisness
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business
 person work burden less stressful.Computers are
usefull
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useful
 in many ways like sending
any
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Email,
make
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making
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a presentation
the presentation
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presentation
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presentations
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, making files, and so on.
Furthermore
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 smartphones taking the place of
computer
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computers
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.In recent times smartphones are now equally smart as
computer
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computers
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also
 they are easy to carry for
people
.
People
use
 mobile
for
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to
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 call
people
,send
massages
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messages
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,play
videogame
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a videogame
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 and
listen
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 music. Another reason is technological evolution
make
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people
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people's
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 life smooth in many ways.
For instance
use
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using
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washing
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a washing
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machine
, dishwasher, microwave oven,
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and airconditioner
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airconditioner
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air conditioner
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 are the
gadgets
 which make a woman's
life less
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lifeless
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 tough.washing
machine
wash
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washes
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the
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clothes without any guidance
as well as
dishwasher
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a dishwasher
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clean
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 the dishes and utensils.
Infact
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In fact
 with the help of our surrounding technology, we can concentrate on more meaningful work.
Also
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this
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these
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gadgets
 can give
people
 spare time which they
use
 to spend with their family.
To conclude
this
 issue, technological advancements make
people
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people's
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 life easy in
buisness
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business
 with
gadgets
 like
computer
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computers
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 and laptops.And,
also
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is also
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 helpful for a person to do daily chores like washing clothes,plates and utensils with the help of
gadgets
 like washing
machine
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machines
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 and
dishwasher
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dishwashers
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.
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