Some believe technology has made our lives too complex and the solution is to lead a simpler life without technology. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,

people

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became

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too much dependent on smart technological

gadgets

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that

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technological evolution has made humans too difficult, and to avoid

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issue individuals should not

use

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any kind of technical

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notion.In the forthcoming

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elaborated

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reasons regarding it.

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and foremost technological advancements are very beneficial for

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in their work-life.To

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multi national

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corporations

uses

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electronic

gadgets

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computers,printers,xerox

machine

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and so on.which make a

buisness

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business

person work burden less stressful.Computers are

usefull

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useful

in many ways like sending

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a presentation

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, making files, and so on.

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smartphones taking the place of

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.In recent times smartphones are now equally smart as

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they are easy to carry for

people

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use

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call

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videogame

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and

listen

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music. Another reason is technological evolution

make

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makes

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people

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life smooth in many ways.

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use

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washing

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a washing

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machine

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, dishwasher, microwave oven,

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and airconditioner

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airconditioner

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are the

gadgets

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which make a woman's

life less

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tough.washing

machine

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wash

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the

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clothes without any guidance

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dishwasher

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clean

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the dishes and utensils.

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with the help of our surrounding technology, we can concentrate on more meaningful work.

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this

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gadgets

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can give

people

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spare time which they

use

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to spend with their family.

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this

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issue, technological advancements make

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people

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life easy in

buisness

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business

with

gadgets

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computer

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computers

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and laptops.And,

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also

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helpful for a person to do daily chores like washing clothes,plates and utensils with the help of

gadgets

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like washing

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machine

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machines

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and

dishwasher

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dishwashers

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Feb 1, 2023

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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