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It is debatable whether an unexpected situation should be acknowledged or should be attempted to forge adversities. From my perspective,
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 the former is quite convincing, it is still overshadowed by the latter thanks to one’s enduring will. On the one hand,
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accepting a bad situation would help us learn to be satisfied with life. Normally, individuals encounter many things that are unalterable in life.
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, when a child is born, they are not decided on their background, rich or poor, ugly or beautiful. Admittedly, in some circumstances,
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 as unemployment or shortage of money, if accepted
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, they would be a failure.
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,
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 just happens to a limited number of citizens who are pessimistic and blame society.
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, when one overcomes difficulties and improves
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 better, one would realize their competence and endure. Generally, challenges occur anywhere and anytime, the essential thing is to discover a solution to conquer it. In modern times, the current generation, with their strong will, achieves success after failure. They never give up no matter how hard it is. Granted, their efforts sometimes make them exhausted and oblivious
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 everything around them.
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, there needs to be a clear direction so that everything can become better
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 your intentions. In conclusion, whether accepting or working through difficult situations, individuals should have an accurate view of their decisions. But, in my opinion, I would opt for
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 until the end to reach what I want.
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