Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is irrefutable fact that these days more and more
people
plants and animals
are disappearing . After
this
phenomenon, the majority of people
say that this
event cause
environmental issues. Change the verb form
causes
While
other people
think that this
event have
Change the verb form
has
another crucial environmental
Replace the adjective
another crucial environmental problem
other crucial environmental problems
problems
. This
essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter.
First of all, nowadays people
have necessity
for new spaces.Add an article
a necessity
the necessity
This
is the reason
,they are cutting down a lot
of forests.For instance
, giving report
by the government Correct article usage
a report
pur
country Change preposition
of pur
50
Correct word choice
that 50
percent
of forests Change the spelling
per cent
cut
down. Add a missing verb
were cut
Moreover
, vast
amount of Add an article
a vast
the vast
abrogens
hunt Correct your spelling
androgens
animals
. They hunt these animals
for their financial resources and other things
. After
this
phenomenon,rare animals
species extinct.
Change the noun form
animal
On the other hand
, people
view Change noun form
people's
is
that environmental Unnecessary verb
apply
problems
main reasons are increasing such
as greenhouses gases , using
a Correct word choice
and using
lot
of vehicle
. Change to a plural noun
vehicles
This
things
is Change the determiner
thing
important
Add an article
an important
reason
for them . Because greenhouses and cars fuels produce harmful gases for environment
.Add an article
the environment
Despite
, there is another main Correct pronoun usage
thisDespite
reason
for Correct article usage
the environment
environment
bad condition. It is using a Change noun form
environment's
lot
of plastics
Change the noun form
plastic
things
. Such as
plastic bottles, Correct quantifier usage
As
dishes
Correct word choice
and dishes
is
harmful Change the verb form
are
for
Change the preposition
to
environment
. Add an article
the environment
This
is the reason
, these days we have a lot
of environmental issues.
In my opinion, using a lot
vehicles greenhouses plastic Add the preposition
oflot
things
really harmful for
Change preposition
to
environment
Replace the word
environmental
problems
.Because they produce harmful gases . And this
bring
Change the verb form
brings
to
Correct pronoun usage
us to
problemfor
Correct your spelling
problem for
environment
. Correct article usage
the environment
Also
,it can negative
Replace the word
negatively
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
people
healthy.
By way of conclusion, Change noun form
people's
in
Change preposition
at
this
time some people
say that main
Correct article usage
the main
reason
to
Change preposition
for
environment
Replace the word
environmental
problems
are
the Change the verb form
is
Los
of particular species of plants and Fix the agreement mistake
Loss
animals
. Yet, others suggest that there are more important environmental problems
. In my view, is
Unnecessary verb
apply
that
Correct determiner usage
the
disappearing
of Replace the word
disappearance
plats
and Correct your spelling
plants
animals
is not important
thing Correct article usage
an important
rather
than crucial Correct word choice
but rather
causes
.Fix the agreement mistake
cause
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