Some people believe that children should do what their parents tell them to do; others think children must learn to think for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that
children
must follow the
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of their
parents
,
while
other suggest that
children
should decide by themselves. In my opinion, I agree with the point of view that
children
need to listen to their
parents
because they are not able yet to choose the right decision.
Children
cannot think raisonnablly because their brain is constantly in development. Indeed, it is well-known that
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youngsters
are often influenced by their entourage
such
as friends or the person they follow
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social media.
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, making
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could
also
be a positive way to learn how to
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in the future.
For instance
, because of a lack of awareness and experience, a child who
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not listen to his
parents
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have
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bully his
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classmates
will be
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corrected by his teachers,
consequently
, he will understand that acting badly is
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wrong and try to correct himself .
On the other hand
,
children
are perfectly able to take
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by
themeselves
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themselves
in order to build a strong personality.
Moreover
,
parents
should leave freedom to their
children
to decide
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what they want after teaching them
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and
value
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.
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, living
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child
chosing
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choosing
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art that
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with
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his
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interests
interest
and skills, could lead him to be a creative person who become likely in the
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a great artist. In conclusion,
although
parents
could have
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regarding the education of their offspring, they should leave them
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basical
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decisions that help them
improving
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their
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obey
  • authority
  • guidance
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • mistakes
  • independent
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • responsibility
  • self-reliance
  • opinion
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