Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however think that other tpes of progress are equally important for a countr. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Governments often address their economic performance to their people, It has always been publicly recognized as a measurement of how effective their governance is.
On the other hand
, some believe that social equality is more significant than economic output in terms of determining social well-being.
This
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outweigh
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sheer economic development.
To begin
with, the economy of a society is about how much capital it can generate.
For example
, the
American
economy stands
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the top of other
nations's
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economy
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economies
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as it produces the most value of products.
American
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government has been prioritizing
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economic development over other sectors since the end of World War II. The nation
evantually
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eventually
attained its economic goal of being a superpower and has maintained it for a long period of time.
However
, the recent national happiness index has indicated that average
American
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are not content despite
American
hegemonic economic power.
This
leads us to
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of
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whether governments should make economic development their most important goal if
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own citizen
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not satisfied with their living condition.
For
this
reason, researchers
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able to examine other factors affecting individual contentment based on the national happiness index. These factors
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of social security, wealth distribution and healthcare, and the
coutry
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country
which has the highest score on them turns out to be Sweden.
To conclude
, economic performance indeed is
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