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some people say that holding sports competitions can cause problems for host countries.Others disagress

#people #sports #competitions #host #countries #disagress
It is a significant moment
to
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 a country to hold a memorable
sports
event
. I believe there are some advantages and disadvantages of holding a competition
event
 On one hand, holding an
event
 is a hard job. There will be a lot of planning and
implementing
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that
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involved. From the signing of
contract
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the contract
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,
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 to building the facilities and making sure that
it
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 would be on the right standard, making sure the delicates will be comfortable, fed and happy during the period and a lot more. It
it
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is a big
responsibilty
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responsibility
 and a lot of money involved as well.
On the other hand
, there are some benefits of being a host country
on
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 a
sports
event
.
Firstly
, it will be a great chance to
improved
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 all the
sports
 facilities in your country, it means, it will not just
benefits
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 your current
sports
 representatives but
also
for
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the younger generations
that
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so that
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 they will have a decent place to
practice
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practise
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.
Secondly
, it can give
confident
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on
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 your players and the chance they can get more gold
medal
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 will significantly increase being they are
at
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there
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 homeland.
Lastly
, it can boost tourism, not only visitors will be there
yo
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to
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 watch the games but usually visit some famous scenery in the area. There might
some
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be some
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 problems hosting a
sports
competion
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competition
 but I believe the
positive
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positives
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 outweigh the negatives.
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