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a country to hold a memorable

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involved. From the signing of

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to building the facilities and making sure that

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would be on the right standard, making sure the delicates will be comfortable, fed and happy during the period and a lot more. It

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is a big

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and a lot of money involved as well.

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, there are some benefits of being a host country

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sports

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, it will be a great chance to

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all the

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facilities in your country, it means, it will not just

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your current

sports

representatives but

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the younger generations

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they will have a decent place to

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, it can give

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your players and the chance they can get more gold

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will significantly increase being they are

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there

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homeland.

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, it can boost tourism, not only visitors will be there

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watch the games but usually visit some famous scenery in the area. There might

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problems hosting a

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competion

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competition

but I believe the

positive

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outweigh the negatives.

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