In some countries, a few people earn extremely high. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount of people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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of views about a
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worker that
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extremely high in some countries. The first view
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that the phenomenon
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positive effect
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the nation.
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, the second view
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that it should be regulated and limited for certain
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. There are actual high-earning workers that
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their country positively.
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, in Scandinavian countries, the high
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increases the
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of their lives. It is because the law there
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high taxes to develop
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great basic services,
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as schools and hospitals.
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the contrary, there are
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some
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that think the government should
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how much the
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range and limits the
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amount
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of
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people
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can earn.
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, in
Indonesia
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there is a system called UMR or regional’s minimum
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to regulate
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the minimum
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of
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can get in
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region
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.
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,
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Indonesian’s
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taxes are not very high compared to Scandinavian countries.
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, the basic services in Indonesia still need some serious improvement in some areas. Personally, I think the best approach
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how
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should be regulated is to combine both views. The control of salaries
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is good to make sure that every worker
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their rights and
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being enslaved by their employer.
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the other hand, it is
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important to make sure every worker
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appreciated and
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a good quality of life that
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supported by
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of
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if they have already fulfilled their obligation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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