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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount of people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#countries #people #country #government #control #salaries #limit #amount
There are two
side
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 of views about a
labor
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 worker that
earn
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 extremely high in some countries. The first view
think
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 that the phenomenon
is bring
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is brought
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 positive effect
for
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 the nation.
On the contrary
, the second view
believe
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 that it should be regulated and limited for certain
people
. There are actual high-earning workers that
impacts
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 their country positively.
For example
, in Scandinavian countries, the high
salary
 increases the
wellbeing
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 of their lives. It is because the law there
also
 arranges
the
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high taxes to develop
such
 great basic services,
such
 as schools and hospitals.
In
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 the contrary, there are
also
 some
people
 that think the government should
controls
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 how much the
salary
 range and limits the
amount
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of
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people
 can earn.
For example
, in
Indonesia
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,Indonesia
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 there is a system called UMR or regional’s minimum
salary
 to regulate
about
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the minimum
amount
 of
salary
 that
people
 can get in
certain
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region
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regions
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.
On the other hand
,
the
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Indonesian’s
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Indonesian
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 taxes are not very high compared to Scandinavian countries.
Consequently
, the basic services in Indonesia still need some serious improvement in some areas. Personally, I think the best approach
of
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 how
salary
 should be regulated is to combine both views. The control of salaries
amount
 is good to make sure that every worker
have
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 their rights and
not
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is not
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 being enslaved by their employer.
In
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 the other hand, it is
also
 important to make sure every worker
being
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 appreciated and
live
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lives
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 a good quality of life that
being
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is
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 supported by
high
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the high
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amount
 of
salary
 if they have already fulfilled their obligation.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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