Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Marketing of any
product
has been playing an important role for the companies in order to sell it to the customers. A plethora of
people
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that there are many things that
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influenced them
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extremely
to buy it because of the advertisement.
While
some argue, nowadays ads are so common that they are unnoticeable. In the following , paragraphs I will elaborate
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with my opinion.
To begin
with, the
people
who blame adverts, to influence them
buying
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unnecessary things and
also
some
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.
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, first companies understand the need
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the
product
and the group of age that they have to focus
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then
they higher a team to market their
product
on several platforms
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Internet,
hordings
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hoardings
or most commonly Televisions.
Furthermore
, they show tempting visuals that make a person
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irresistible
unless you brought it.
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a weak point. That means
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buy sometimes those things that
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have a need
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them. And it is all created by producing
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extraordinary ads.
However
, on the other ,hand many
people
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nowadays advertisement
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the
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products has become so regular that many simply just don't notice them. They put their point, by stating it is because of technology that they see
advert
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everywhere and constantly.
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they add, it
just
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in
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today's
era waste of money and
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instead
of it companies should make
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product
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products
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. In conclusion, I believe advertising a
product
is
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part
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for
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company
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to attract
people
but, if it is displayed in front of
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person
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people
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constantly it can be
unnoticable
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unnoticeable
and
people
can
ingore
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ignore
it rather than creating
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temptation of buying it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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