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Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think it can be harmful for children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

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In some households,
children
 get paid for
work
,
while
 others do not.
This
 essay will evaluate the benefits and drawbacks of
children
 getting compensated for doing chores. One of the main
advantage
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 of doing paid
work
 is learning about the concept of
money
. Most often,
this
 lesson is not taught at school. When
children
 received
money
 from
work
, they could learn the lesson of saving and spending. They might be more aware of the value of
money
 and understand the idea that
money
 does not come easily. Another benefit of working is for
children
 to learn skills that they would not be exposed to
otherwise
.
For instance
,
children
 could learn social skills by working in a shop and interacting with customers. There is a lot to be learnt outside of classroom settings. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, there are disadvantages to paid
work
. One drawback is removing precious time from
play
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the play
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 of the
children
. At a young age, some parents think that it is imperative for
children
 to explore and play in an unstructured and free environment.
Work
 can be saved for later on in their lives.
Moreover
, some parents believe that
children
 should not be incentivised to
work
 for
money
. They want to teach their
children
 to
work
 for a cause, for
self improvement
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,
instead
 of for
money
reward
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. Through being paid at
work
,
children
 understand the relationship
of
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between
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hardwork
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hard work
 and compensation, even though the time could be spent on other areas. In my opinion, as long as the
work
 is balanced with school
work
 and free play, there is a lot to be learnt from working at a young age.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • financial independence
  • responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • impact
  • education
  • exploitation
  • negative effects
  • social life
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