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Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?

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In the modern world, people cannot imagine their life without cutting-edge technology,
although
 there are some bad habits for the youth generation
such
 as playing video
games
.
Children
 should study or play outside
instead
 of playing computer
games
,
it
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as it
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 affects their health, and developing
mind
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minds
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. Parents should make a
time
 limit for playing
games
. The aim of
this
 essay is to investigate the factors that led to these problems and propose some possible methods to deal with
it
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them
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. One of the most contingent reasons for playing computer
games
 is having free
time
.
Children
 who are stuck behind the computer may have problems with eyes, spin and extra weight. Their organism is just growing, when they sit behind the monitor, they do not think about
time
. It is
such
 a bad habit which crushes their mind. Most video
games
 have criminal content.
For example
, in
Russia
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,Russia
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 one student made a terror attack after playing a game like
Counter Strike
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Counter-Strike
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. His mind was blind. After playing a criminal game they think that it is normal acting. Some possible
solutions
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solution
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 to
this
 problem are paying attention to
children
's free
time
. Parents should provide activities for them and motivate them.
For instance
, one of the famous figure skaters, Denis Tan, has been interested in skating since he was a child. I think he did not have enough
time
for
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to
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 play video
games
. He was motivated to be the champion, and develop his skills. In conclusion, we can significantly lessen spending
time
 behind the monitor, by motivating our
children
 to be champions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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