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The picture below shows how a hot balloon works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

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The drawing gives information about the construction of a hot balloon and its mechanics. Looking from
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 perspective, there are three main components, namely burner, envelope and parachute valve, which take part in the five basic stages of the way it functions. As can be seen from the diagram, the envelope is the largest part of the hot balloon, with many gores, which are made up of panels. A skirt is attached to the teardrop -shape component and connects to an enormous basket using ropes. There is the burner which hangs above and propane tanks are inside the basket.
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 flap with the role of releasing a reasonable rate of heated air. In terms of the main principle to operate the hot air balloon, the propane cylinder is used to power the burner, which heats the air. Once it becomes lighter, it will ascend to the top in order to blow up the envelope, so that the entire structure can be lifted.
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