What are the biggest problems of an ever-increasing elderly population and what can we do to solve them?

One of the biggest issues
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nowadays is the increase in
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population. Older people are not used to living in the modern world with constant change. It's causing a lot of problems in our society. An ever-increasing elderly population is causing a lot of problems. One of the
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is the economic one, linked to the pension. Job retirement is common among almost every
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above 60 years old and
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above 65 years old. The problem starts when the older population overgrows the working part of society.
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, the government doesn't have enough money for pensions, and in
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younger people have to work more or we get to pay more taxes in everyday life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • geriatric healthcare
  • chronic diseases
  • pension plans
  • elderly abuse
  • retirement homes
  • accessible housing
  • public transportation
  • age discrimination
  • support networks
  • family caregivers
  • preventive healthcare
  • physical activities
  • community engagement
  • advocacy programs
  • legislation
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