The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.

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The graph compares the frequency of visiting community sites during the first and second years since it has been introduced.

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, the number of second-year attendees outweighs the first-year ones with only August being an exception. Looking into details, both figures started off from less than 5000 in September, rising dramatically to the point of 10000 in November for new users and 17500 for regular ones.

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, statistics levelled off for 2 months, though in January the numbers dropped slightly for experienced visitors and plummeted for others ( 16000 and almost 0).

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,in February and March the decrease stoppedpped and ,

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, in April people started to visit the web pages and figures increased significantly for both groups of users( 1250 and 2250 correspondingly). Despite

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growth, in August numbers went down again ( 1500 and 1250 respectively).

To sum up

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all of the above, both categories followed a similar pattern throughout the year.

annaosmateskoThu Feb 02 2023

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

154 words

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The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.

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