Junk food advertising has a harmful effect on society and should be banned. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Recently, it has been observed that the consumption of fast
food
has drastically increased all over the world.
According to
some people,
advertisements
are to be blamed for
this
cause. They claim that putting a ban on the promotion of junk
food
is the only way to reduce its consumption. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
statement and will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
, there are several reasons why fast
food
promotion must be banned.
Firstly
, children
spends
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majority
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of their time watching television. Fast
food
companies like McDonald’s purposely
advertises
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through kid’s shows and
attracts
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them into buying unhealthy
food
.
A recent
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research,
for example
, showed that 70% of
the
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fast
food
are
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consumed by people after watching TV commercials.
Consequently
,
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advertisements
pose a great threat to people’s well-being.
In addition
,
such
advertisements
usually never showcase their ingredients to
public
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the public
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that
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may cause harmful
effect
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to
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one’s self or
the
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society.
Moreover
,
large
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amount
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of sugar and oil added to fast
food
could result in high blood pressure, heart
diseases
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disease
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and obesity. The sugar quantity,
for example
, is not included in a
Coca Cola
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ad and people are unaware of how
such
promotions can negatively impact the health of their society. Resultantly,
advertisements
of junk foods may become a part of
individual’s
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daily diet. In conclusion, I believe advertisement of unhealthy cuisine is not only harmful but should completely be banned. The problem of excessive consumption of junk
food
can be
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if authorities could place different restrictions to limit children’s exposure and by informing the public about the details of what they are buying.
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