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Many people believe it is better to study in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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 of the police
budget
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 in 2017 and 2018
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 the pie charts depict distributions of
money
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 in 2017 and 2018. Generally speaking, it is obvious that the total
budget
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 for the police increased.
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, most
money
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 was allocated to salaries for employees. With regard to the
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 of
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, in 2017,
national
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 government gave 175.5m
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 only provided 38m.
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,
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budget
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 given by the national government grew to 177.8m .
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, other
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 only rose slightly to 38.5m.
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considerable growth in local taxes, from 91.2m to 102.3m. In terms of the pie charts ,
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 75%
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money
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 salaries in 2017, it decreased moderately to 69% in 2018.
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,
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 for technology accounted for 8% and
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14% in 2018. Meanwhile, buildings and transport made up
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17% in both years.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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