Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As international
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become more popular these days, arise various problems. The development of specialised
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for top players becomes debatable.
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who support it and
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who are against it. Supporting top
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with specialised apparatus is one of the ways to retain talent. They are often offered citizenship in various places with advanced technology and better
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.
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, a recent study at the University of Waterloo showed that
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are more willing to stay in their home country to compete with slightly worse
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than to compete in other countries .
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, by providing them
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best, talents are kept.
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,
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who
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it think that government should provide
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facilities for everyone as the
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in the country is obese. Tackling obesity
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exercising but the lack of
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equipment is pushing them to the deeper end of obesity. Most of the countries which suffer from obesity tend to have the lowest
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machinery
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per square foot.
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was shown in the latest JSTOR magazine featuring the USA, Canada and Malaysia.
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, I think that it is best to provide
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with the best
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as that would generate tourism income for the government which will put us in a positive loop. With that, we can use it to build
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furniture for the norms.
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to that, some
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do not require any equipment
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as running and jogging which require only motivation. Concluding above, it is best for the country to provide athletes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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