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Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As international
sports
 become more popular these days, arise various problems. The development of specialised
machinery
 for top players becomes debatable.
This
 essay will provide my views on the matter and the perspectives of
people
 who support it and
people
 who are against it. Supporting top
player
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 with specialised apparatus is one of the ways to retain talent. They are often offered citizenship in various places with advanced technology and better
machinery
.
However
, a recent study at the University of Waterloo showed that
professional
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professionals
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 are more willing to stay in their home country to compete with slightly worse
benefit
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benefits
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 than to compete in other countries .
Hence
, by providing them
the
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 best, talents are kept.
On the other hand
,
people
 who
against
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are against
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 it think that government should provide
sports
 facilities for everyone as the
people
 in the country is obese. Tackling obesity
require
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 exercising but the lack of
sport
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 equipment is pushing them to the deeper end of obesity. Most of the countries which suffer from obesity tend to have the lowest
sports
machinery
 per square foot.
This
 was shown in the latest JSTOR magazine featuring the USA, Canada and Malaysia.
Lastly
, I think that it is best to provide
professional
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 with the best
machinery
 as that would generate tourism income for the government which will put us in a positive loop. With that, we can use it to build
sports
 furniture for the norms.
Additionally
 to that, some
sports
 do not require any equipment
such
 as running and jogging which require only motivation. Concluding above, it is best for the country to provide athletes.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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