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Childhood obesity is increasing at rapid rates in developed countries. What are some of the causes of this problem? What are some ways in which childhood obesity rates can be reduced?

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In developed countries, the number of
children
 with
obesities
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obesity
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 is increasing day by day. In general, the main
cause
 of
this
 phenomenon is the poor parenting style that most
parents
 use recently. To reduce
the
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childhood
obesity
 rates,
parents
 should implement a stricter parenting style that forces
children
 to have a healthier lifestyle. Some people may have a question about what is the relationship between poor parenting style and
childhood
obesity
.
This
 essay will show the relationship and all practical examples on a daily basis. A lot of
parents
 do not realize that they
cause
children
 to be obese. They allow their
children
 to consume
snacks
 in large
quantity
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quantities
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 regardless of the time, with no restrictions, and no healthier snack options.
For example
, they gave their
kids
 pocket money to
school
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the school
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 where the
kids
 go to school without getting any breakfast from home or any meal box prepared. When the
kids
 arrive at school they will buy any
snacks
 that they love and are available at their schools.
Kids
 will not take a look at the nutrition facts
at
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 the
snacks
’ packaging. In
this
situation
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 they will consume anything that
favors
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favours
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 them including but not limited to unhealthy
snacks
 with a high amount of sugar in
it
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them
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 and dangerous handmade
snacks
 at schools.
Parents
also
 discourage
children
 from doing more physical activity outside
home
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the home
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.
This
 phenomenon happened as there is an increase in kidnapping cases recently. When
children
 rarely do physical activity and consume a lot of unhealthy
snacks
 they will
cause
 their body weight to keep increasing until they become obese.
To sum up
 , when we take a look at the process of
childhood
obesity
, we can see that
children
’s actions are the main
cause
 of it.
However
, we have to remember that
children
 do not have the same rational capacity as adults, and
parents
 should actually be responsible for their
kids
. If
parents
 can impose strict rules
of
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 snacking time, give
a healthier snack options
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healthier snack options
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 to their
kids
,
encourage
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and encourage
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 them to do
moref
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more
 physical exercises,
then
children
’s body weight can be maintained and the rate of
childhood
obesity
 will
also
 decline.
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