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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#scientists #tourists #travel #environment #pole #development
It
is observe
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 that with the development of technology,
scientists
 and
tourists
 can move to remote areas
such
 as
South
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the South
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 Pole. There are both benefits and drawbacks, but I believe that the merits are
more
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greater than
demerits
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.
To begin
 with, there are several factors why travelling to remote areas is disadvantageous.
Firstly
, the natural environment can be destroyed.
Scientists
 and
tourists
 produce rubbish during
the
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 travelling, which
is
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will
be threw
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 away by them. It
cause
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increasing
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the
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amount of rubbish, and
it
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result
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 in
environment
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 problems and wildlife
extict
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extinct
.
Secondly
,
scientists
 and
tourists
 can be exposed to dangerous events easily. There
is
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 not have systems
such
 as
accidents
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 prevention from wildlife. If they face dangerous events, they will
difficult
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 to receive
someone
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 help.
These
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 means, people can not be guaranteed their safety during
the
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travelling.
On the other hand
, travel to
remote
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the remote
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 natural
environment
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environments
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 is beneficial to
scientists
 and
tourists
. First of all, they can increase their knowledge. There are
many
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wildlife
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of wildlife
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,
which
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 they have not known before.
Therefore
,
scientists
 and
tourists
 can expand their knowledge
as well as
 broaden their horizons.
In addition
, they can have various experiences.
Tourists
 can have all lifetime of experience. In the case of
scientists
, they can publish new
reaserch
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research
paper
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papers
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.
Such
 experiences will be motivated
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them for
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for
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in
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 their life. In conclusion,
although
 there are several demerits, travelling
remote
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to remote
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 areas is beneficial.
Thus
,
scientists
 and
tourists
 should be
encouarged
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encouraged
 to travel.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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