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The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap?

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The main causes of the increasing inequality between rich and poor
nations
 are complex. Some of the keys include Globalization, technological advancements, and the unequal distribution of resources and opportunities. Globalization has led to a few wealthy countries concentrating on wealth and power,
while
 many poor
nations
 are left behind. Technological advancement has
also
 created a new economic opportunity, but access to the technology and the skill required to use it. The unequal distribution of resources and opportunities is
also
 a significant factor in the gap between rich and poor
nations
. Many poor
nations
 have limited access to education, healthcare, technology, and essential services. To reduce the gap between rich and poor
nations
, we need to address the root causes of inequality,
such
 as limited access to education, healthcare, and opportunities for economic growth. And
also
 the wealthy
nations
 should be working together to support the poor
nations
 to build their capacities
such
 as financial assistance and transfer of technology and knowledge.
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