Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always good.

Many
people
argued about
further
working
life
. The first claims that all employees should choose 1
time
1 niche. An alternative belief regards
this
as changing the
job
is marvellous. In
this
,essay both points of view are going to be examined and a particular opinion will be provided. On the
one
hand, when my parents lived in USSR and there was a Capitalism
time
. My grandmother said, if you had finished
one
particular course at the University, you would work only in
one
niche,
otherwise
you could lose your
job
and you might do to jail.
For instance
, the law that
people
who were unemployed could go to jail in USSR. Old
people
still have those things about them.
For instance
, I have a friend which has finished the economy university and his parents always tell him about you to have spent all his
life
at
one
job
. He does not improve himself, for his
job
improving is not necessary and he does not have some change in his
life
. He even has the same salary all
time
.
That is
his nurture which does not give him the to develop his mind. On the
one
hand, we are living in the capitalist
time
in the technology era and in today`s contemporary ,world a lot of
people
toprefer
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prefer
change
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their work.
For instance
, my friend has changed his work more than 3 times
this
year. He was a supervisor, a bookseller and a chauffeur. He likes changing jobs and he earned more than my friend who works in
one
niche.
As a result
,
this
trend is becoming more and more common.
Nevertheless
, it is necessary to take into account all the circumstances of each individual case.
To sum up
, I firmly believe that we better make changes in our
life
,
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if you had improved your mind, you would take a tremendous profit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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