In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?
Some argue that physical shops will receive non-
cash
payments only, thus
people
should pay using their cards or mobile phones in the future. This
will not happen because when the power is off then
the business completely stops. Some folks especially elderly people
will have difficulties with this
shift.
Implementing card and app payment
only will cause trouble to the business when the electricity is going down. This
is because this
cashless method relies greatly on the internet to make transactions occur. Thus
when a disaster such
as a flood damages the electricity infrastructure, the town will be blacked out. In this
situation people
still need to buy their necessities, however
, the shops cannot sell their stocks because there will be no way to receive the money, therefore
the businesses have to halt their activities. For example
, during the earthquake in Yogyakarta, the residents preferred to shop in local stores because they accepted cash
payments and avoided shopping in card-payment
-only businesses because there was no electricity for days.
Upon the shift in payment
methods, the elderly generation will face difficulties buying their necessities. This
is because most of them are slow to catch up with technology updates such
as using an e-wallet to pay their groceries. In addition
, many of them may not have a bank account and many of this
generation solely use cash
for every transaction. For example
, in Indonesia, the government’s data shows that many older people
do not have any bank account, particularly those who work in informal jobs. They only have cash
thus
they are unable to follow the shift.
In conclusion, cash
payment
will still exist in the future because when the power is off, it will halt business activities. Some older people
will not be happy because they do not own bank accounts to perform the cashless payment
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