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Health is wealth". To what extent would you agree ?

#health #wealth
The saying "
health
 is
wealth
" is very apt as good
health
 comes from a good physique that enables
one
 to enjoy the pleasures and manage the challenges of
life
.
health
 here comprises the mental and the physical.
Thus
 I agree that good
health
 is actually
wealth
 as it allows
one
 to lead an existence without being hampered by disabling circumstances
such
 as disability (both mental and physical), or medical conditions
such
 as diabetes, cancer and other potentially fatal diseases. A disabled person faces a lot of challenges n
life
 including having to depend on another for basic needs and perform simple tasks. The situation is even more daunting if you are paralyzed and mentally unfit to lead a normal existence.
One
 would not be able to earn an income becoming a burden to family and friends (though the latter are usually encouraging and supportive). Many cancer patients and others who suffer from debilitating sickness spend huge amounts of money on treatment.
In addition
 to that, they have to undergo very painful medical procedures. A cancer patient
for example
 typically has to undergo chemotherapy and radiotherapy which have undesirable side effects
such
 as vomiting, hair loss, weakness and other unpleasant symptoms. Despite all that, there is no guarantee that
one
 would survive
such
 sickness.
Thus
, our good physical and mental well-being provides us with the opportunity to enjoy
life
 without any hindrances. The "
wealth
"
one
 derives from good
health
 is actually a
life
 free from circumstances that afflict us in some way and
hence
, affect our happiness and comfort. There are many people in
this
 world who are extremely wealthy but
due to
 poor
health
, they are unable to enjoy their material coins. Their daily performance is hampered by physical and mental incapacitation and
hence
, they can be actually considered "poor". A materially poor man or woman but rich in terms of
health
 actually can be termed as "wealthy' as he or she is not hampered by sickness. the latter does not have to fork out money for treatment and can enjoy a peaceful and blissful
life
. In short, good
health
 is
wealth
 as no amount of money can cure
one
 of
terrible
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 sicknesses. Good
health
 ensures a fulfilling and enriching
life
.
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