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Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help solve the problem?

#traffic #congestion #cities
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Nowadays, it is obvious that
the
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congestion
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 in most countries is on the increase and cities are becoming busier. In my opinion,
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 problem must be tackled because it is
global
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a global
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 issue and most
people
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, especially those who live in big cities, are affected by it. One of the main
reason
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 for traffic jams is that the majority of
people
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 prefer using their own cars
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 of public
transportation
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(bus, underground and e.t.c)
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, it is not impossible to find good and effective ways to control the
congestion
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. Public
transportation
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 is the easiest way to solve
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 problem. If there is comfortable and cheap public
transportation
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such
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 as trains and buses,
people
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 will choose to use it rather than drive.
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, in some countries buses are the most comfortable, helping to reduce the
congestion
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 of roads and streets during rush hours. The government should provide much better public transport and make prices available to all.
Second
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 reason is poor road conditions and bad infrastructure put
worst
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a worst
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 effect on moving
machine
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machines
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. the Government has no plans to resolve
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 issue. In major cities where there is
burden
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the burden
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 of heavy shipment vehicles roaming around the city slowing down the pace of
people
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.
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,
journey
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the journey
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 of hundreds of miles turns into
hurdle
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a hurdle
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 because of broken roads and no bridges to narrow the gap of time. In conclusion, the problem of traffic
congestion
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 can be tackled by improving public
transportation
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 and by improving infrastructure.
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