Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people.what the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective in reducing crime

Some people assumed that crime is rising in most countries around the world, and the number of young people involved is increasing. The causes of
this
appear to be focussed on three areas, and a number of solutions
also
appear to be possible. Perhaps the major factor here is the less supervised young adults in
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society.
For instance
, if both
parents
are working. There will be no proper supervision
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the young adults. They just occupied themselves by watching television which might
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inappropriate
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how
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to be a good citizen and end up applying it in
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society.
This
pattern appears to be global, with the results that the
parents
can not focus on their
children
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behaviour or even
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not know what are they doing when they are not at home. Another cause is maybe peer pressure when they tend
up
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to blend in with their friend. They are not a part of the group if they
dont
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don't
cooperate in doing mischievous things. Turning to possible solutions, an obvious step would be to encourage young children to participate in some
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after
school
.
For instance
, if they love playing sports or
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play,
this
can help them focus
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some activities that will help them to develop a skill and at the same time
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them not focus on doing some crimes. A second remedy might be is having a short course included
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school
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curriculum regarding the output of doing bad behaviours to discourage
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doing it.
Finally
,
parents
should allocate some of their time to make sure their children are not going on the wrong path. They might consider a regular family getaway so they can have
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quality time with them and
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not feel aloft to each other.
Im
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summary, the lack of supervision from
parents
and peer pressure appear to be the main causes. A coordinated response by immediate family,
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school
group and
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may well lessen the severity of the situation.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In general

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