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The Differences between countries have become less evident, so we can enjoy the same films, brands and TV programs. To what extent do you think the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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 the development of
the
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society, our community became more and more patterns of opening to the outside world. Different elements have blended
in
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into
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 our culture which can let us enjoy various cultural exchanges without
travel
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 to other regions. The counties will not become less evident, because the things from different
countries
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 and regions would not be replaced. It only will be improved and perfected from other
culture
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knowledge
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. In my
opinion
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 the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. First of all,
the
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open
knowledge
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 and culture are shared with all of us and
people
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 can improve their
policy
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policies
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 and academic research more quickly than before. In
this
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 situation, scholars in all different areas will have a huge improvement which benefits all
people
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 in our world.
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, the computer
technique
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technology
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 in our region comes from western country’s
knowledge
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 and it has been used to create and improve our own unique
knowledge
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. On the other
side
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 it developed our
knowledge
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 and social civilization indirectly.
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, it gives us another choice of enjoying the same treatment without going to other
countries
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. We can be given keen enjoyment by the other entertainment brands and Tv programs as other
people
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 from all
countries
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. It can give us better entertainment.
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Last
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 of all, the difference between
countries
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 and
countries
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 will not be similar and replaced by others. It will only be improved and
benittf
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belief
 for all the
people
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 in the world.

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