In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for fewyears, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss and give your opinion.

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topic is telling about in many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new
teachers
and
doctors
should work in rural
areas
for
few
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years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work.
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my opinion,
teachers
and
doctors
want to work in urban cities not in rural
areas
because
their
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can
earn
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handsomely. Rural
areas
does
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not provide that kind of handsome salary.
Nevetheless
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Nevertheless
, if they are working in rural
areas
government
should
also
give them good shelter.
As a consequence
, good schools and medical facilities should have to be available in both urban cities and rural
areas
.
Moreover
,
doctors
and
teachers
are not responsible for
this circumstances
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but
only
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government
should have to be blamed. In conclusion, if
government
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is
transfering
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transferring
transforming
the jobs of good
doctors
and
teachers
they should have to give
good
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a good
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amount of salary.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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should have to build good schools and medical facilities in rural
areas
injustice should not have to be
done
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in rural
areas
.
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