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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to be become a good sportsperson or musician. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some
people
 believe that some
children
 are born with certain
talents
 for sports or music. Yet, others do have no innate
talents
. There are different opinions on
this
 situation. Some
people
 claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsperson or musician. In the following essay, I briefly discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, there are a lot of
people
 who have natural
talents
 in the world. They play a significant role in the development of our country. From my point of view, a teacher who has
talents
 for musicians or sports is better to teach
children
.
On the other hand
, despite
such
 grave positions, there are other
people
 who think in another way. They claimed that any person can be taught to become a good singer or actor and even a teacher. Yet, teachers cannot instruct all things
children
 as talented
people
.
Likewise
, some
children
 do not want to learn methods. Because lessons depend on their parents' ambitions. In my opinion, talented
people
 are the best to teach
children
 to become good masters. Because they understand the methods of their jobs.
Then
 they can encourage young boys and girls quickly rather than teachers.
To conclude
, I reiterate my position that talented
people
 are the best to teach
children
 to become good singers or actors and even teachers rather than studying at schools or colleges to create the best masters in the world. I am sure most
people
 would agree with my opinion.
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