The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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In the diagram life cycle of a honey bee is
being
shown. In Unnecessary verb
apply
general
Add a comma
,general
this
cycle takes thirty-four to thirty-six days
.
The cycle starts when females lay their eggs
. Actually
they lay one or two Add a comma
,Actually
eggs
once in
every three Change preposition
apply
days
. Thoose
Correct your spelling
Those
eggs
hatch after nine or ten days
depending on environmental and genetical
variations. After hatching of the Replace the word
genetic
eggs
it took five Add a comma
,eggs
days
for nymphs to get out of their eggs
. Since then
they start emerging to
young Change preposition
as
adults
slowly. The nymphs can moult three times as they grow and in general
Add a comma
,general
this
happens in fifteen days
. It can be understood that they have become young adults
by looking stripes
on their Change preposition
at stripes
back
Fix the agreement mistake
backs
,
if Remove the comma
apply
this
stripes have emerged it means Change the determiner
these
thatb
the nymphs have become young Correct your spelling
that
adults
.When they become young adults
they have just one more step left for being a mature honey bee
. That Fix the agreement mistake
bees
last
step takes four days
to become an adult. After being adult
females start laying their Fix the agreement mistake
adults
eggs
in three days
and they continue their life as adult honey bees.Submitted by robertasottile.rbst on
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