The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
In the diagram life cycle of a honey bee is
being
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shown. In
general
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this
cycle takes thirty-four to thirty-six
days
. The cycle starts when females lay their
eggs
.
Actually
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they lay one or two
eggs
once
in
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every three
days
.
Thoose
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Those
eggs
hatch after nine or ten
days
depending on environmental and
genetical
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variations. After hatching of the
eggs
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it took five
days
for nymphs to get out of their
eggs
. Since
then
they start emerging
to
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young
adults
slowly. The nymphs can moult three times as they grow and in
general
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this
happens in fifteen
days
. It can be understood that they have become young
adults
by looking
stripes
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on their
back
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,
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if
this
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stripes have emerged it means
thatb
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that
the nymphs have become young
adults
.When they become young
adults
they have just one more step left for being a mature honey
bee
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bees
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. That
last
step takes four
days
to become an adult. After being
adult
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adults
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females start laying their
eggs
in three
days
and they continue their life as adult honey bees.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • laying of eggs
  • queen bee
  • hatch into larvae
  • rapid growth
  • develop into pupae
  • significant transformation
  • emergence of the adult bee
  • matures fully
  • cyclical nature
  • colony’s survival
  • reproduction process
  • subsequent generations
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