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You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college manager . In your letter, •explain what you like about the cafeteria •say what is wrong with it •suggest how it could be improved

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I am writing to draw your attention to the
cafeteria
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 service at college that needs some improvements. I have been eating
food
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 from the
cafeteria
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 for one year.I have found its
food
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 quality is not lower than a three-star restaurant and
prices
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 were cheaper as compared to other colleges.
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 they have maintained
food
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 quality, recently the owner of the
cafeteria
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 has revised the
prices
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. An abrupt change in the price list is unaffordable for
students
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. they have doubled the
prices
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 of those
food
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 items that have been sold out quickly.
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, they have reduced their sitting area and replaced it with a dish-washing space.
students
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 usually have to wait for half an hour to find out a place to sit and have some
food
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. Visitors usually struggle to get out of the sitting area.
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 the overcrowded
cafeteria
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 at lunchtime,
students
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 have to buy foodstuff from hawkers outside. I have noticed absentees in my class
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 increasing
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 stomach pain and eating unhygienic
food
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 from outside. As a solution, I would recommend you take notice of the revised
prices
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 and make them affordable for
students
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.
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, it would be appreciated if you could broaden the space in the
cafeteria
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 so that
students
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 do not have to wait for a longer time in queue. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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