Nowadays people are trying to have a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems could this create? How can people overcome them?

These days individuals are attempting to obtain victorious
career
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and joyful family
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at
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time
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.It is difficult today for youngsters to be with their parents
as well as
their family
due to
thier
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their
working condition in order to get a
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successful
carrier .
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if they want to
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these problem
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they should utilize the holidays together and
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. on the one hand,
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are now very busy with their personal task and they do not manage to get spare time for their family .today children do not get time from their parents, Many small children
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swing house and looked after
while
their parents are busy in doing something else .
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many it companies offer swing house at
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for working mother
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left
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children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balancing
  • Burnout
  • Juggling responsibilities
  • Neglecting
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Dissatisfaction
  • Setting realistic goals
  • Priorities
  • Fulfillment
  • Effective time management
  • Allocation
  • Reducing stress
  • Seeking support
  • Coping mechanisms
  • Balanced life
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