The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides data on the number of men and women in the gym over 30 years period between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
,
while
figures for female gyn
membership
saw an upwards trend, figures for males decreased over the whole period. Despite
this
, in 2005 men's
membership
reached its peak. In 1980 around 2000 males had a
membership
to the gym
whereas
1000 memberships were owned by women. In the following 1985, both figures rose twice as much as in 1980 and were 2000 and 4000 respectively. By the next decade
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figure for males fell drastically and was overtaken by women. In the remained duration, the figure for female
membership
fluctuated,
then
it declined slightly and eventually
at the end
of the cycle was
on
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almost 1000 higher than in 1980. Men's memberships went up enormously reaching
its
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' peak in 2005 at 500 memberships.
Then
,
however
, it declined by around 5 times and was about 600.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words membership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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