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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public trasnport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt in the fact that the government should invest in improving the transit facilities.So people opine that they should put more money into the current public transport system ,
while
 others suggest that it should introduce fast trains to make intercity travels much easier.In
this
 essay, I shall discuss both sides
along with
 my stand on
this
.
To begin
 with,improving public transport will curb the number of vehicles on the road.
For instance
,
population
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the population
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 will prefer to go by state transport if they have a choice to do so ,as it will save money to a large extent.Other than that,it will reduce environmental pollution, since the number of gases emitted from the vehicles will be lessened.Many metro cities have adopted
this
 method and found it to
successful
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.
On the other hand
, building new railway lines will
also
 help in intercity travel in a short span of time.
This
 will help students to go to good colleges even though they are far away from their city.
Moreover
, these fast tracks can
also
 help goods transit in a better and faster way.Nowadays, many people are working in metro cities away from their homes.So
this
 intercity train will help
this
 younger generation to reach their home at least once
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a week which in turn will improve family life. In a nutshell ,both views have their own merits and demerits.But I believe that before thinking of a wider expansion,the government should first improve the already existing facility as it can help
community
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the community
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 in their everyday travel.
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