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The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.

The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.
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The pie charts compare the opinions of full-time and part-time
students
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 about their university services, including IT
support
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 and opening
hours
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was more positive feedback with regard to the opening
hours
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 than the IT
support
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.
Also
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, full-time
students
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 tended to be more satisfied with the two services than their part-time counterparts. Regarding IT
support
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, over half of the surveyed full-time
students
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 said that they were very happy with
this
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 service,
while
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 only a fifth of part-time
students
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 reported that they were very happy.
In contrast
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, just 15% of the
students
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 studying full-time were not satisfied with IT
support
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, in comparison with 45% of part-time scholars. The proportion of both types of
students
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 being quite happy with
this
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 service was relatively the same, at about one-third. The majority of full-time and part-time scholars felt very happy with the current opening
hours
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, at 87% and 72% respectively. Only 1% of the examined full-time
students
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 were not satisfied with the opening
hours
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whereas
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 the figure for part-time
students
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 was a little higher, at 5%. The remaining 12% of the surveyed full-time
students
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 felt quite happy with
this
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 service, as opposed to nearly a quarter of part-time
students
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.
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