Success without hard work is not possible . To what extent do u agree ?

We want success
as well as
  prosperity in
life
. But we do not do what
are
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needed in achieving these. If we want  to make our
life
glorious, we must follow some rules.
Firstly
, we have to be industrious. Since, without hard work, success in
life
is impossible.
Secondly
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we should be sincere in our activities. Some people think that good luck is at the root of all achievements in
life
. But to
them
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nothing is
further
from
truth
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than it. Because every success in
life
depends totally on our activities. If we spend time in idleness, we must suffer.
Finally
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we should be honest in
life
because
this
virtue helps us greatly to gain our
goal
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