The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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This
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bar chart shows the proportion of
men
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and
women
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of various ages who often exercised in Australia in 2010.
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, the data shows that both
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and
women
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tend to be more physically active than young adults, but
women
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over 45 engage in more physical
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than younger
women
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. In 2010, more than half of Australian
men
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(53%) and
women
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(47%) aged 15 to 24 participated in regular physical
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.
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women
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engaged in similar
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levels between the ages of 25 and 44,
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's
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levels dropped dramatically beyond that age. Just 39.5% of
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aged 35 to 44 participated in regular exercise,
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a much higher percentage of
women
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in the same age group (52.5%) regularly exercise.
On the other hand
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,
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accounted for almost 53 per cent of the group comprising adults aged 45 to 54.
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females aged 35 to 64 had a higher participation rate in sports training than teens, the disparities between teens and
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most senior adults were less than 1%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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