In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

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It is true to say that school surrounding is well for
childrens
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children
children's
studies.As far as I am concerned,home
tution
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tuition
is not need of every
students
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student
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furthermore
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school
teacher
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teachers
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are now good enough to teach their students in
classroom
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the classroom
a classroom
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.
while
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,
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apply
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home
tution
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tuition
is a good choice for
who
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those who
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want to do extra for
further
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competion
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competition
exam.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social development
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Curriculum
  • Pedagogy
  • Diversity
  • Structured learning
  • Professional educators
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Real-world challenges
  • Cultural exposure
  • Societal norms
  • Homeschooling
  • Peer relationships
  • Skill acquisition
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