shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people. Do you think they must be encouraged to do other things rather than shopping.

There is no denying the fact that shopping is becoming a favourite thing to do in their free
time
rather than involve in other stuff. I
belive
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that youngsters
has
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have
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significant addition
in
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to
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other
things
.
This
essay will discuss both
side
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bofore
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before
come
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coming
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to any conclusion. There are several
benifits
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benefits
of shopping.
This
is
the
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a
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good
way
to explore
things
,
as well as
spend coins.
Firstly
, young
people
can enjoy their
life
and remove stress about
study
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the study
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and other
things
.
Secondly
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they can spend
time
with their
loveones
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loved ones
love ones
as well they can share their
opion
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opinion
opinions
, talk
aboot
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about
personal
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their personal
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life
and give importance to each other.
For instance
long
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a long
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time
ago one of my
teacher
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teachers
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said shopping is the best
way
of
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to
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spend
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spending
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time
with
loveone
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loved ones
because we can think clearly and share our feelings wisely.
In
addition
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young
people
can explore and experience other
things
likewise
abot
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as
how to
sale
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, how to deal with customers and marketing only if they want to.
On the other
hand
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if shopping is
joyful
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a joyful
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thing to do with so many benefits but it
also
has some downsides. Young
people
forget to save money and
time
, which are
important
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an important
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lesson
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lessons
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of
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in
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life
. They take
life
so easy they
alwasy
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always
think about shopping
instead
of giving
contribution
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contributions
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in
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to
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other activities. I
belive
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believe
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that for teenagers unpaid community service should be
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a compulsary
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compulsary
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compulsory
part of high school programs.
This
way
they learn about working for
charity
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a charity
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,
improving
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and improving
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the
neighborhood
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instead
pf
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of
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just shopping . In conclusion,
i
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do believe shopping is
excellent
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an excellent
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way
of
spend
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spending
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money and
time
but young
people
should
also
involve in
other day
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another day
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to day important activities which are very useful for
community
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the community
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and
also
themselves
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for themselves
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. It's worth
to do
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doing
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both.
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