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The diagram below shows how electricity generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates
that
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the
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electricity
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electric
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power
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 generation cycle in the given hydroelectric
power
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station
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. It can be clearly seen that there are two main stages in the
water
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-based electric
power
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station
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. Indeed, these stages have different working functionalities and styles
depends
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 on time, day or
night
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. The main central supply resource of
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power
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the power
a power
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station
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 is
water
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 provided
from
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by
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river
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the river
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. In the daylight,
at the first
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stage
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,
dam
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the dam
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 is opened and the
water
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 was accumulated in
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
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 during the
night
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started
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and started
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 its flow to the second
stage
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. The generator which contains
power
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 lines supplied to
national
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the national
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 grid
is
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started to work thanks to reversible turbines on the bottom of the second
stage
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 of
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station
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the station
a station
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 with the
power
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 of the
water
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 pressure.
Finally
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,
water
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 is collected into
lew-level
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a lew-level
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reservoir
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 pool until the beginning of the
night
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. When it comes to the
night
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, the cycle starts again from
low-level
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the low-level
a low-level
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reservoir
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 with reverse movements in order to supply
water
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 amounts in
high-level
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the high-level
a high-level
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reservoir
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.
Water
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 is pumped from the low-level
reservoir
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 to
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
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 at the top
of
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apply
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of the first
stage
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.
In
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At
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the
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apply
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night
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,
generator
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the generator
a generator
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 is not active to produce electricity. After
all
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,all
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waters
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water
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 have transported to
high-level
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the high-level
a high-level
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reservoir
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,
dam
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the dam
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 is closed in order to keep
water
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 in the pool.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, night, water, stage, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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