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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this i a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

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Nowadays it is common that
teenagers
have
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 jobs
while
 they are attending school. In my humble opinion, I believe that
this
 is a good idea. In fact, there are several advantages that the youngest can have if they
work
,
such
 as earning their own money, understanding the value of
time
 and developing different skills. To commence with, we have to consider that starting
work
 means earning money. So, if a teenager starts to
work
, the job can allow him/her to have different benefits.
For example
, a young girl or a young boy can choose to spend money that they earned on activities that their parents usually don’t like. In
this
 way,
these youngster
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this youngster
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 can choose to go to restaurants or to the gym more frequently, without depending economically on their parents.
Secondly
, working
while
 studying can make them understand the value of
time
. Usually, mostly when we are young and we don’t have a lot of duties, we overlook the value of
time
 and waste it. So, if
teenagers
 decide to have a job, having a lot of activities to do makes them appreciate the free
time
 that they have in the others hours.
Furthermore
, sometimes some types of
work
 are linked to the studies that the
teenagers
 want to attend at university or college. Working in a kindergarten is not a bad idea if someone wants to attend social studies, as working as a cashier is not bad if someone else wants to study economics. Obviously, a person can be a teacher or an accountant even if before the university they never worked in that area, but at the same,
time
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 they will acquire new experiences. In conclusion, we have to say that even if there could be some disadvantages
working
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while
 attending school, probably there are more benefits for
the
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teenagers
, and
this
 choice can make them better people.
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