The age at which people have children has risen. Some people believe that this may cause problems for both these families and the societies they live in. What is your opinion about this?

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In today's days, men and women postpone their first childbirth compared with past days. Many

people

argue that

this

may cause problems for

society

and individuals. I strongly agree with

this

opinion.

Due to

increased life expectations, many young

people

get married late, compared with older generations. Even after marriage, they are reluctant to give birth to a child immediately.

Due to

increased tensions and age factors, there is a high chance of getting infertility problems. One survey conducted in my homeland says that there is a 100% growth rate in establishing fertility centres over the

last

year and

also

people

visiting these centres are

also

inclined.

Furthermore

, giving childbirth late would

also

create negative impacts on their family

as well as

society

For example

, if we have our first baby at the age of 35,we won't have the proper time and energy to spend with our loved ones. By the time a child completes education, we will cross 50. As

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parents we won't have the energy to support them when they really need it in their teenage. Not only that youngsters' availability in

society

also

will be delayed, which affects the human life cycle balance. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the majority of

people

's opinion that

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giving childbirth late will cause problems for both individuals and

society

Submitted by janardhan.gangineni on Sun Feb 05 2023

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The age at which people have children has risen. Some people believe that this may cause problems for both these families and the societies they live in. What is your opinion about this?

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