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Some students take one year off between school and university. Do advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Studying at
university
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 crucial decision .Many people
belive
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believe
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one
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gab
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gap
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 between
school
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 and
university
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significant
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a significant
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imact
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impact
while
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,
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another claim
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 that
jonning
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joining
university
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 as soon as
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possible
more
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 advantages. In
this
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eassy
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essay
i
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 will argue both ideas
after
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 that I will explain why I support the
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notion
 of studying
in
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university
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 after
school
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 of
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avoid
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apply
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of
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apply
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the
sequance
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sequence
 of learning and
be
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being
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 faster
joinning
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joining
 labour market.
Body paragraph 1
Firstafull, applying to faculty
immediatly
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immediately
 after
school
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 going to prevent
forghting
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fighting
forgetting
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significant
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one
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 year gab going to destroy the
sequance
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sequence
 of learning. For
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 to my sister
who
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lost
one
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 year as she had
surgary
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surgery
.She had noticed studying quite
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challenging
commper
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computer
 to whom had no long
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break
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.
Body paragraph 2
In
additon
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addition
 to that , the faster
beganning
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beginning
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university
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earler
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earlier
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graduated
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. Since learning in faculty
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last
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 not
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a shortperiod
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shortperiod
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short period
 of time ,Student
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fascinating
 to graduate in order to work .
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instance
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one
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in
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natinal
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national
university
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show
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 that 76
percent
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per cent
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 of student
keen
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are keen
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 to graduate
quikly
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quickly
 in order to have a
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job
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.
Conclusion
In
conclusin
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conclusion
. I support the notion of
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direct
dirct
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directly applying
appying
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applying
 to higher education after
school
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 in order to ease
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studying
studyin
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studying
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university
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 and the faster chance of
woking
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working
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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