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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates
people
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's behaviour in terms of consuming and purchasing
coffee
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 and tea for 4 weeks in five Australian cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart).
Overall
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, the residents who went to cafes for
coffee
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 and tea have shown the highest percentage among the other categories, followed by the
amount
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number
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 of purchases of instant
coffee
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.
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,
people
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 in Australia had the least interest to buy fresh caffeine which was shown as the lowest percentage based on the survey. As can be seen on the graph, Melbourne and Hobart have shown the most significant interest in instant
coffee
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 which has shown in nearly 64% of the population
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 it had less amount of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 within 4 weeks. Despite that, approximately 44% of
people
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 in Sydney tend to consume fresh
coffee
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,
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 it was the highest number for the purchase of fresh
coffee
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 among the other countries. Over 50% of society in Australia seems to have
lots
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lot
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 of interest in fresh
coffee
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 followed by the average amount that has purchased instant
coffee
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.
While
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 the behaviour of going to the cafe throughout these 4 weeks tends to differ between these countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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